This week I offer an excerpt from ‘A Vengeance of Angels’ (book 2 of the Angels of York). Again, it will contain mild spoilers if you haven’t read the first book ‘A Construct of Angels’.
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Michael has been taking action that has angered the Eternal Realm (what we have come to know as Heaven) enough for the Realm to despatch an Angel to warn him; ‘Cease your activities or suffer destruction.’
A single booming ‘NO!” precedes the Angel’s arrival.
Michael, despite his status as an ex-Angel, is afforded no respite from the might of this powerful being;
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The voice that smashed into me was powerful enough to shatter my bones. I was slammed into the grass, my breath exploding from my flattened lungs as a whoosh. A brilliant figure materialised before me, radiating a furious energy that set my blood wailing with terror even as I scrambled to regain my feet.
Twice my height, its incandescent limbs barely distinguishable as such, the being seemed to sneer at my diminutive mortal form as my knees buckled and I dropped into supplication before it. The ozone-laden air rippled madly as the being’s voice thundered past and through me, vibrating deep into my lungs.
My body begged for release; to wail out its anguish at having been subdued in such a matter, but little more than a whimper escaped me as the air continued to resonate from the being’s thunderous words.
I was helpless before it.
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Okay…I threw in one extra…so sue me. 
Write on!
Feb 26, 2013 @ 12:34:48
Blimey!
Feb 26, 2013 @ 17:17:25
I hoped to create a first-hand experience of someone’s encounter with a non-biblical angel. Did it work?
Feb 27, 2013 @ 13:01:10
It’s certainly powerful and has a real sense of force about it. The reader feels the bewilderment and nascent fear of the mortal in the face of the unknown. If I had one minor criticism, it would be that some of the sentences verge too far into passive voice and maybe detract a little from the overall strength of the piece. Still leaves me wanting to read on though!
Feb 28, 2013 @ 12:08:11
Jon. The sentencing might be a consequence of having to make small modifications to squeeze everything into six (seven) sentences. This extract differs slightly from the MS – but just ‘lifting’ them would have left a nonsensical extract.